The dialogue still need improve, I will write a new blog about CAN's screenplay this weekend.
2013年3月18日星期一
The storyboarding of my new work [CAN]
The dialogue still need improve, I will write a new blog about CAN's screenplay this weekend.
2013年3月17日星期日
The analysis of my new work [friendship] part II
Actor always is a problem to me. In my story, there always have been many dialogues. It is a challenge to actors. A twelve minutes film, we worked seven hours on shooting. Most time I need to direct actors how to present it, how to say it, how to do it. Fortunately, my three actors did it very well. Jing Zhang, which acts Amy in the story, she has the most actor's lines and she worked very hard. Thanks to her respectable work.
There are characters in this story. Main characters are two girls, Amy and Mary. Tom looks like an outlier in this story. But he helps us to understand these complex emotion between two girls. Obviously, he is indispensable, too.
In my opinion, Mary is a very calculating girls. Though she disliked Amy very much, she still invited her to the dinner, and she never presented her loath. I do not really like these kind of girls. However, these kind of girls can be the leader(class monitor) frequently in our life.
Amy is not a very bad girl. But nobody likes her. Why? Just because she is a very selfish girl. She never really considers to invite others. And she didn't want to join in others' dinner as well because of the gifts. She is a very pitiful girl. In China, we believe poor people must have hated the place.
5. Editing
Edit work is a long time work. Because there are too many video materials need to sort out. It takes me about one week, every day I worked on it for five hours. In the beginning, I want it to be a ten minutes short film. Less than ten minutes are better. But when I edited it, I found it's really hard. If I decline it to be ten minutes, audiences maybe can't understand the story. Therefore, my first draft is a 12.45 minutes work.
And then, I realized there are many repetitive pictures appeared in among of three stories. So I begin to do the second edition work. I declined some unnecessary and repetitive pictures and edited it to be 11.30 minutes. Though it's still more than ten minutes, I consider it's the best edition.
The analysis of my new work [friendship] part I
I decided to use "Friendship" to be the title of this story because it's very ironical. Actually, there is no friendship in the story.
Ostensibly, three characters are talking very happy and fair-spoken in the first story. However, in the next two stories, they don't like each other actually. In other words, they are not really friends. They even dislike each other very much.
But they still have dinner together. Mary cooked for Amy. Amy bought gifts for Mary and Tom. Though they hate this night, they looked enjoy dinner very well. According to this fact, I believe could be a very interesting and double-edged remark title.
2. screenplay
The first draft of screenplay created last year. At that time, I wrote a simple story just about dinner. There are not so many emotions in it. And I thought it can be a six minutes short film. I discussed this story with Shupeng Yuan, my classmate. And he thought it's too simple. It will be very boring film if we work on this screenplay. So I laid it down and focus on other works.
In February, when we decided to have a small film festival I remembered this screenplay again. I still believe it is a good story. The problem is too simple. I can improve it, make it more mature. So I started to write it again. And this time, I connected it to my project-character's emotion. I put more emotion plot in the screenplay and it would be ten minutes work.
I wrote the first draft and the second draft in Chinese. Because the characters speak Chinese in the short film. And I translated it in the third draft. In the final draft, I improve some language.
3. cinematography
I'm interested in using fixed lens very much so I used a lot of fixed lens in this work. I think fixed lens could help audiences recognize the scenes and the character. The cameraman is Shupeng Yuan. He is very good at shooting. So I can totally believe him.
On the other hand, when I wrote my shooting script, I used some direct skills. Just like: a. Use car(object) to help transfer the scene. b. Make the picture and sound separated. It's an effective skill to present emotion in the story.
2013年3月15日星期五
Experimental Film — Friendship
It's a 12 minutes short experiment for explore how to present character's inner world with over-voice. There are three parts in the film. However, these three parts are the same story, every part just try to show different character's different emotion in their heart.
The story is about friend. Two girls look like good friends, but actually they didn't like each other. They talked very happy at dinner time. However, in their mind, there has another voice to speak the truth.
I will analysis this work from several aspects(screenplay, cinematography, character, acting and editing...) at weekend.
By the way, I need to thanks for my classmates Shupeng Yuan, Sherry and Larry. Without their help I cannot finish this filming work.
Screenplay【Friendship】draft II
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Screenplay Friendship
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EXT. NIGHT. STREET
AMY is walking fast on the road alone with two gifts in her
hand.
She looks tired.
AMY
(Voice-over)
It’s the third time. I really did
not want to have dinner with her.
But she invites me three times!
Though I’m very tired today, I need
to buy gifts for them. It’s so
annoying!
INT. NIGHT. KITCHEN
MARY and TOM are talking in the kitchen. TOM is cooking at
the same time.
MARY
To tell the truth, AMY is the most
unpopular girl in our class. Nobody
likes her.
TOM
So why did you invited her?
MARY
I cannot be so narrow like others.
I’m the class monitor.
TOM
She still isn’t your friends now,
is she?
MARY
No. To tell the truth, I don’t like
her either. She is a really selfish
and self-righteous girl. Anyway, I
don’t like her.
TOM
You invited one person who you
don’t like to have dinner with us.
Why did you do that?
MARY
Why do you have so many questions?
TOM stop talking reluctant.
(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: 2.
MARY
What’s the time? She’ll be late!
This moment, Mary’s cell phone rang. She picks up the phone.
MARY
Ah, Amy! OK, I’ll open the door for
you!
INT. NIGHT. HOUSE
AMY arrive Mary’s house. Mary and Tom come out.
MARY
(HAPPY AND KINDLY)
Hi, Amy, my friend! Welcome!Come
in, dishes have finished.
MARY
(voice-over)
Huh! Do you think you are an
empress? Make us waited for a long
time!
AMY
I’m sorry I’m late. This is a gift
for you. Do you like it?
AMY
(voice-over )
Remember to put on make-up! It
spent me so much money.
MARY
OH, It’s cosmetics. Thank you so
much! It must be expensive.
MARY
(voice-over)
Don’t you know I never use
cosmetics?
AMY
And this one, a bottle of red wine,
is preparing for TOM.
TOM
Oh, thank you, Amy. You are so
kindly. Come in, please. Don’t
stand outside.
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3.
INT. NIGHT. KITCHEN
AMY, MARY and TOM walk into the kitchen.
AMY
Oh so many dishes!
MARY
Most dishes are cooked by TOM.
However, look! This little pork is
cooked by myself.
AMY
Really, it smelled very nice! Can I
taste it?
MARY
Of course, you can.
MARY
(voice-over)
Huh! I’m after you’ve never eaten
anything so delicious!
AMY take the chopsticks and taste the fish.
MARY
How about it?
AMY
(intoxicated)
It is truly delicious, how did you
cook it?
AMY
(voice-over)
Shit! It tastes so terrible.
TOM
(voice-over)
Delicious? I believe Mary forgets
to put salt in it!
MARY
(smile. happy)
It’s a secret.Sit down, please.
Let’s begin!
MARY
(voice-over)
You’ll never know that!
MARY and TOM sit down as well. They start dinner.
(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: 4.
AMY
This one tastes very well. Did you
cook it, TOM?
AMY
(voice-over)
Mary cooked so terrible! Tom’s dish
is delicious. Let me eat more.
TOM
(change the plates)
Yes. Eat more. Help yourself.
AMY
Thank you.
MARY
(voice-over)
You are so nasty!Dressed so ugly. I
even cannot imagine where did she
buy these ugly clothes. Oh, God.
Please don’t let her dress these
ugly clothes to scare other people!
MARY
You looks very beautiful today!
Where are you buying your clothing?
AMY
Do you think so? I believe it’s
beautiful either.Let me tell you a
very nice shop, ...
AMY
(voice-over)
Mary is a very terrible girl
indeed. Your dish is unpalatable.
You don’t know how to buy nice
clothing. You are even never
make-up! Oh, I can’t believe Tom
can bear you!
MARY
Tom is very busy recently. He had
to write three reports before next
month!
AMY
Really? It is so busy. However, I
was very envious of you. Working
with each other all the time as
lovers. So nice!
(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: 5.
AMY
(voice-over)
Of course, Tom is excellent. How
about you, Mary? You were Cheating
on the exam. Shame on you!
MARY
There’s a boy in his heart. Ah,
Amy, I heard that your boyfriend is
staying in China. How about him?
MARY
(voice-over)
I heard she had parted last month.
Let me ridicule her.
AMY
Don’t mention it. We were parted
last month!
AMY
(voice-over)
You are very good at touching the
tender spot, aren’t you?
TOM
Ah? What happened?
AMY
It’s hard to describe. Man always
fickle in love. Tom, you cannot be
bad for Mary!
AMY
(voice-over)
Break up with this stupid woman as
soon as possible!
TOM
How could I?
MARY
How dare he? If he dare to be bad
for me, I will strangle him in the
cradle!
MARY
(voice-over)
You are looking forward us to break
up immediately, aren’t you? Bitch!
(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: 6.
TOM
Damn it! Are you sisters last
lifetime? Why are you talking so
beaming with each other!?
Amy laughing.
MARY
Amy, you are too cowardice to be
bullied.
MARY
(voice-over)
The punishment is well deserved for
you!
AMY
Hi, my ex-boyfriend would not leave
me if he as good as Tom.
AMY
(voice-over)
Be bullied? If you dare to bully
me, I will give you a lesson!
TOM
(voice-over)
Ah, talk about me again. I need to
change the topic...
TOM
Don’t talk about it. Let’s enjoy
the dinner!
MARY
Yeah, enjoy it.
MARY
(talk to TOM)
You need to eat more as well.
AMY
(smile. voice-over)
Nobody wants to see your show!
They eat for a while.
AMY
I’m stuffed. You’re really hard
today.
(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: 7.
AMY
(voice-over)
I’m exhausted. I should go home
right now.
MARY
Don’t be so polite. We are the best
friend, aren’t we?
MARY
(voice-over)
You are not tired indeed. You just
know how to eat!
TOM
Yes. We can have dinner together
here frequently.
AMY
I can’t always come here to bother
you. Come to my house next time!
AMY
(voice-over)
Idiot wants to come here again.
MARY
(voice-over)
Which fool will visit your kennel?
AMY
However, my culinary skill cannot
compare with Tom.
TOM
Don’t say that. We are beginner,
too.
AMY
What’s the time now?
TOM
Oh. It’s already ten o’clock.
AMY
Ah? It’s so late!
TOM
Maybe I can take you home if you
need.
(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: 8.
AMY
Is that OK?
MARY
(voice-over)
What an annoying bitch!
TOM
Of course. Let’s go.
MARY
That’s a good idea. Tom can take
you home.
INT. NIGHT. HOUSE
Tom opens the door.
AMY
See you, Mary!
AMY
(voice-over)
Finally over. What an irksome
women!
MARY
See you! See you next time.
TOM
I’ll be back soon.
MARY
OK. Be careful.
MARY
(voice-over)
Finally over. What an annoying
women! No wonder nobody like her.
EXT. NIGHT. STREET
Amy and Tom walk on the street.
TOM
(voice-over)
Amy looks like a good friend of
Mary. As Mary likes Amy so much, I
can introduce my friend to be Amy’s
boyfriend.
(CONTINUED)
----------------------- Page 10-----------------------
CONTINUED: 9.
TOM
There’s a good friend of mine. He
is also a single...
AMY
Does he look like you?
TOM
What? Me?
AMY
I mean the culinary skill. How
about him?
TOM
Actually, I don’t know about it. He
has not cooked for us until now.
Amy smiles and keeps silence. They walk for a while.
AMY
That’s my home.
TOM
Here we are. It’s not very far.
AMY
Do you have a cigarette? I want to
have one.
TOM
Yes, I do. Here.
TOM
(voice-over)
She enjoys smoking! My friend will
not like it.
Tom gives one cigarette to Amy. Then give her points on
smoke.
AMY
What’s his major?
TOM
Who?
Amy is laughing.
TOM
Oh, you mean my friend. He is
studying arts.
(CONTINUED)
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CONTINUED: 10.
AMY
My ex-boyfriend was studying arts,
too.
TOM
Really? It’s a sad coincidence.
AMY
The man who studies science knows
how to care with girls. Just like
you.
TOM
(voice-over)
I study in engineering...Forget it,
cut the crap.
TOM
Well, I’ll back home.
Amy nodded.
TOM
See you!
AMY
See you!
Tom leaves. Amy looks at him and smoking. After a while, she
finishes smoking. She throws the cigarette and stamps it
out. Then ,look at the sky, spits the last smoke.
2013年3月11日星期一
Screenplay【Friendship】
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Screenplay
FRIENDSHIP
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EXT. NIGHT. STREET
AMY is walking fast on the road alone with two gifts in her
hand.
She looks tired.
AMY
(Voice-over)
It’s the third time. I really did
not want to have dinner with her.
But she invites me three times!
Though I’m very tired today, I need
to buy gifts for them. It’s
annoying!
INT. NIGHT. KITCHEN
MARY and TOM are talking in the kitchen. TOM is cooking at
the same time.
MARY
To tell the truth, AMY is the most
unpopular girl in our class. Nobody
was like her.
TOM
So why did you invite her?
MARY
I cannot be so narrow like others.
I’m the class monitor.
TOM
And in the end she is not your
friends?
MARY
No. I don’t like her either. She is
a really selfish and self-righteous
girl. Anyway, I don’t like her.
TOM
You invited her to have dinner with
us, but you don’t like her. Why did
you do this?
MARY
Why do you have so many questions?
TOM stop talking reluctant.
(CONTINUED)
----------------------- Page 3-----------------------
CONTINUED: 2.
MARY
What’s the time? She’ll be late!
This moment, Mary’s cell phone rang. She picks up the phone.
MARY
Ah, Amy! OK, I’ll open the door for
you!
INT. NIGHT. HOUSE
AMY arrive Mary’s house. Mary and Tom come out.
MARY
(HAPPY AND KINDLY)
Hi, Amy, my friend! Welcome!Come
in, dishes have finished.
MARY
(voice-over)
Huh! Do you think you are an
empress? Let me waited so long!
AMY
I’m sorry I’m late. This is a gift
for you. Do you like it?
AMY
(voice-over )
Remember to put on make-up! It
spent me so much money.
MARY
OH, It’s cosmetics. Thank you so
much! It must be expensive.
MARY
(voice-over)
Don’t you know I do not use
cosmetics?
AMY
And this one, a bottle of red wine,
is preparing for TOM.
TOM
Oh, thank you, Amy. You are so
kindly. Come in, please. Don’t
stand outside.
----------------------- Page 4-----------------------
3.
INT. NIGHT. KITCHEN
AMY, MARY and TOM walk into the kitchen.
AMY
Oh so many dishes!
MARY
Most dishes are cooked by TOM.
However, look! This little pork is
cooked by myself.
AMY
Really, it smelled very nice! Can I
taste it?
MARY
Of course, you can.
MARY
(voice-over)
Huh! I’m after you’ve never eaten
anything so delicious!
AMY take the chopsticks and taste the fish.
MARY
How about it?
AMY
(intoxicated)
It is truly delicious, how did you
cook it?
AMY
(voice-over)
Shit! It’s terrible.
MARY
(smile. happy)
It’s a secret.Sit down, please.
Let’s begin!
MARY
(voice-over)
You’ll never know that!
MARY and TOM sit down as well. They start dinner.
AMY
This one tastes very well. Did you
cook it, TOM?
(CONTINUED)
----------------------- Page 5-----------------------
CONTINUED: 4.
AMY
(voice-over)
Mary cooked so terrible! Tom’s dish
is delicious. Let me eat more.
TOM
(change the plates)
Yes. Eat more. Help yourself.
AMY
Thank you.
MARY
(voice-over)
You are so nasty! Dressed so ugly.
I even cannot imagine where did she
buy these ugly clothes. Oh, God.
Please don’t let her dress these
ugly clothes to scare other people!
MARY
You look very beautiful today!
Where are you buying your clothing?
AMY
Do you think so? I believe it’s
beautiful either. Let me tell you a
very nice shop, ...
AMY
(voice-over)
Mary, you are a very terrible girl
indeed. Your dish is unpalatable.
You don’t know how to buy nice
clothing. You are even never
make-up! Oh, I can’t believe Tom
can bear you!
MARY
Tom is very busy recently. He had
to write three reports before next
month!
AMY
Really? It is so busy. However, I
was very envious of you. Working
with each other all the time as
lovers. So nice!
AMY
(voice-over)
Of course, Tom is excellent. How
about you, Mary? You were Cheating
on the exam. Shame on you!
(CONTINUED)
----------------------- Page 6-----------------------
CONTINUED: 5.
MARY
There’s a boy in his heart. Ah,
Amy, I heard that your boyfriend is
staying in China. How about him?
MARY
(voice-over)
I heard she had parted last month.
Let me ridicule her.
AMY
Don’t mention it. We were parted
last month!
AMY
(voice-over)
You are very good at touching the
tender spot, aren’t you?
TOM
Ah? What happened?
AMY
It’s hard to describe. Man always
fickle in love. Tom, you cannot be
bad for Mary!
AMY
(voice-over)
Break up with this stupid woman!
TOM
How could I?
MARY
How dare he? If he dare to be bad
for me, I will strangle him in the
cradle!
MARY
(voice-over)
You are looking forward to us to
break up immediately, aren’t you?
Bitch!
Amy laughing.
MARY
Amy, you are too cowardice to be
bullied.
(CONTINUED)
----------------------- Page 7-----------------------
CONTINUED: 6.
MARY
(voice-over)
The punishment is well deserved for
you!
AMY
Hi, my ex-boyfriend would not leave
me if he as good as Tom.
AMY
(voice-over)
Be bullied? If you dare to bully
me, I will give you a lesson!
TOM
(Ah, talk about me again. I
need to change the topic...)
Don’t talk about it. Let’s enjoy
the dinner!
MARY
Yeah, enjoy it.
MARY
(talk to TOM)
You need to eat more as well.
AMY
(smile. voice-over)
Nobody wants to see your show!
They eat for a while.
AMY
I’m stuffed. You’re really hard
today.
AMY
(voice-over)
I’m exhausted. I should go home
right now.
MARY
Don’t be so polite. We are the best
friend, aren’t we?
MARY
(voice-over)
You are not tired indeed. You just
know how to eat!
(CONTINUED)
----------------------- Page 8-----------------------
CONTINUED: 7.
TOM
Yes. We can have dinner together
here frequently.
AMY
I can’t always come here to bother
you. Come to my house next time!
AMY
(voice-over)
Idiot wants to come here again.
MARY
(voice-over)
Which fool will visit your kennel?
AMY
However, my culinary skill cannot
compare with Tom.
TOM
Don’t say that. We are beginner,
too.
AMY
What’s the time now?
TOM
Oh. It’s already ten o’clock.
AMY
Ah? It’s so late!
TOM
Maybe I can take you home if you
need.
AMY
Is that OK?
MARY
(voice-over)
What an annoying bitch!
TOM
Of course. Let’s go.
MARY
That’s a good idea. Tom can take
you home.
----------------------- Page 9-----------------------
8.
INT. NIGHT. HOUSE
Tom opens the door.
AMY
See you, Mary!
AMY
(voice-over)
Finally over. What an irksome
women!
MARY
See you! See you next time.
TOM
I’ll be back soon.
MARY
OK. Be careful.
MARY
(voice-over)
Finally over. She is a truly
annoying women! No wonder nobody
like her.
EXT. NIGHT. STREET
Amy and Tom walk on the street.
TOM
(voice-over)
Amy looks like a good friend of
Mary. As Mary likes Amy so much, I
can introduce my friend to be Amy’s
boyfriend.
TOM
I have a good friend, he is also a
single...
AMY
Does he look like you?
TOM
What? Like me?
AMY
I mean the culinary skill. How
about him?
(CONTINUED)
----------------------- Page 10-----------------------
CONTINUED: 9.
TOM
I don’t know about it. He has not
cooked for us until now.
Amy smiles and keeps silence. They walk for a while.
AMY
That’s my home.
TOM
Here we are. It’s not very far.
AMY
Do you have a cigarette? I want to
have one.
TOM
Yes, I do. Here.
TOM
(voice-over)
She enjoys smoking! My friend will
not like it.
Tom gives one cigarette to Amy. Then give her points on
smoke.
AMY
What’s his major?
TOM
Who?
Amy is laughing.
TOM
Oh, you mean my friend. He is
studying arts.
AMY
My ex-boyfriend was studying arts,
too.
TOM
Really? It’s a sad coincidence.
AMY
The man who studies science knows
how to care with girls. Just like
you.
(CONTINUED)
----------------------- Page 11-----------------------
CONTINUED: 10.
TOM
(voice-over)
I study in engineering...Forget it,
cut the crap.
TOM
Well, I’ll back home.
Amy nodded.
TOM
See you!
AMY
See you!
Tom leaves. Amy looks at him and smoking. After a while, she
finishes smoking. She throws the cigarette and stamps it
out. Then ,look at the sky, spits the last smoke.
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